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Light bulb eyes,
burning through me like
electric currents,

Your waves
crash into me
as I dream,
your ocean spits me out
through seaweed teeth,

and I love you,
but you blink light
and breathe water,
so not only am I blind,
I am drowning.

just being near you, overwhelms me.
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NicolaWingedDeity Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I completly adore this... u_u :heart:
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blackdahlia911 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012
oh thank you :heart: :heart:
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:iconnicolawingeddeity:
NicolaWingedDeity Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Always (:
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RisingWolve Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
"so not only am I blind,
I am drowning."
That packs a big punch. Holy moly. And everything else seems to lead up right to it. Incredible. :+favlove:
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blackdahlia911 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012
Thank you so much :heart: I'm so glad it was able to make an impact!
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RisingWolve Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! I really enjoyed this poem. :3
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
"seaweed teeth" <-- this is great. evokes the perfect feeling right there with the sound of it like chewing peanut butter.
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blackdahlia911 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012
haha thank you! :heart:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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