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I am consumed by a love concocted of carnivals, carousels, and the color green.
My heart beats to the sound of the circus but if I were a lion, you could not tame me.
I want to be wild and free with you, feel you, feel your thoroughbred horse skin over muscle,
then muscle against bone until we are running with our backs to the neon lights,
moving through time in a space of supernovas,
completely unbridled movement of hips and hooves and heavenly angels,
then it's your firefly wings burning through me like a Saturday night fever
and I'm sweltering under your touch,
but my love for you is strange
because as you hold me with empty arms,
I realize that I have been writing passionate poems
about days that were never ours
and moments that I only wished.

So God if you can hear me
please let me have him
or at least give me the strength to move on.
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I can't imagine my life without him, please don't take him away.

I ended up crying as I wrote this.
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~SoraIsMyHomeboy Sep 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
normally, as a critique, i would say that the last part in italics isn't necessary and somewhat detracts from the piece, but after reading the context and situation, i understand and i probably would've added the same thing. lovely work though, your imagery and analogies are great
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~CelestialMemories Sep 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I can really feel your emotion and love in this poem, which has concocted itself into a beautiful poem with brilliant imagery that only takes away what little breath I have left after understanding the message this poem creates. Beautiful job.
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:iconblackdahlia911:
Thank you so much. Your comments always leave me breathless, your support means so much to me!
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~CelestialMemories Sep 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh shucks. My comments would be nothing if it wasn't for your fantastic work.
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~Less2TheTruth Sep 14, 2012  Student Artist
Wow... longing and lovely
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~Less2TheTruth Sep 14, 2012  Student Artist
The pleasure was all mine surely
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This is raw and beautiful. I can feel your passion and fear coming through strong. It has vivid imagery and a powerful statement.
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:iconblackdahlia911:
Thank you so much, you have no idea how much that means to me! :heart:
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