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i. You write me notes scribbled on sandpaper
and I run them across my face,
scraping away layers of saccharine skin,

ii. Your eyes, made of cookie crumbs,
I'd like to dip them in milk
and watch them melt,
smoking like dry ice,

iii. You churn my childish heart
in circles and in circles
till I slip into cardiac arrest,

iv. I just remembered that time you
wrapped your arms around me like vines
and held me until you couldn't,

v. Oh what I'd give for a pair of
fortune cookie lungs,
inhaling intuition,
exhaling self-fulfilling prophecy,

vi. I've been fishing for horoscopes,
pasting them onto my bedroom walls
and on the backside of my skin,
hoping that they tell me that
today is the day you will be mine,

vii. But your soul is made up of sins
and I do believe in forgiveness,
but forgive me, for I cannot forget.

i do not like being away from you even if away isn't all that far
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:iconheartsneverbreak:
This is so super great. What inspired it?
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:iconblackdahlia911:
Thank you :heart: It's about wanting someone so bad even when they are already taken and even if you eventually got them, they wouldn't be any good for you, because they would most likely break your heart.
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:iconheartsneverbreak:
Aww. Been there. ):
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dreamsinstatic Aug 17, 2012  Professional Writer
Your amazing work has been featured in Friday Night Features.
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:iconblackdahlia911:
Thank you so much, I really really appreciate it!
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dreamsinstatic Aug 18, 2012  Professional Writer
You're welcome.
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Adonael Aug 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I loved stanza five. You use very picturesque and vivid metaphors :)
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Adonael Aug 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No worries :)
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:iconaugust-green:
I suppose, reluctantly, I'm vain enough to say that I'm a tough customer, so I don't comment often. However, this was impressive and I think you should know that.

i. v. vii. were fantastic.

Keep writing.
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