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i. You write me notes scribbled on sandpaper
and I run them across my face,
scraping away layers of saccharine skin,

ii. Your eyes, made of cookie crumbs,
I'd like to dip them in milk
and watch them melt,
smoking like dry ice,

iii. You churn my childish heart
in circles and in circles
till I slip into cardiac arrest,

iv. I just remembered that time you
wrapped your arms around me like vines
and held me until you couldn't,

v. Oh what I'd give for a pair of
fortune cookie lungs,
inhaling intuition,
exhaling self-fulfilling prophecy,

vi. I've been fishing for horoscopes,
pasting them onto my bedroom walls
and on the backside of my skin,
hoping that they tell me that
today is the day you will be mine,

vii. But your soul is made up of sins
and I do believe in forgiveness,
but forgive me, for I cannot forget.

i do not like being away from you even if away isn't all that far
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HeartsNeverBreak Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2012
This is so super great. What inspired it?
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blackdahlia911 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2012
Thank you :heart: It's about wanting someone so bad even when they are already taken and even if you eventually got them, they wouldn't be any good for you, because they would most likely break your heart.
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HeartsNeverBreak Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012
Aww. Been there. ):
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012
Your amazing work has been featured in Friday Night Features.
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blackdahlia911 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012
Thank you so much, I really really appreciate it!
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
You're welcome.
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Adonael Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I loved stanza five. You use very picturesque and vivid metaphors :)
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blackdahlia911 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012
thank you :heart:
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Adonael Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No worries :)
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August-Green Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012
I suppose, reluctantly, I'm vain enough to say that I'm a tough customer, so I don't comment often. However, this was impressive and I think you should know that.

i. v. vii. were fantastic.

Keep writing.
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blackdahlia911 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
Well thank you so much for commenting and the compliments, I am honored! I really appreciate it :heart:
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lalaith913 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012   Writer
It's interesting how the use of food imagery really adds to the sense of craving involved here. Nice piece!
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blackdahlia911 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
Thank you! :heart: I do like food, a lot... haha
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NicolaWingedDeity Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Have some Cookies. :3 This was Utterly awesome, I hope you know you are a genious. :heart: I just loved this!
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blackdahlia911 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012
Thank you so much :heart: you are way too nice! I don't know about the genius part haha
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NicolaWingedDeity Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha! well you are *bows* (= You're welcome! It was my pleasure!
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Absolutely wonderful. The images you put in my mind really took my breath away. Fantastic job! For this I am watching you! :)
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blackdahlia911 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012
thank you :heart: i really appreciate the watch!!!
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is perfect. Each scene is so vivid in it's own way. I like the first one a lot. I think I've fallen victim to it too many times. I also like the way your thoughts progress, and conclude in the last stanza. All your words say so much (if that makes sense.)
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blackdahlia911 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012
wow, thank you so much! you have really brightened my day, this is definitely more of a personal piece so i'm so glad that you like it :heart:
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Sorelfaen Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012
your imagery is beautiful
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blackdahlia911 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012
thank you so much :heart:
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